tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8542683203952246031.post920882603450859574..comments2023-11-12T09:33:59.402-06:00Comments on Spirit Called: Tagged! By GollyHuntresshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08155372788872245758noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8542683203952246031.post-14176102500510977212012-07-31T13:02:09.168-05:002012-07-31T13:02:09.168-05:00love all the clever descriptions! great characters...love all the clever descriptions! great characters!Tara Tylerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07587802105993889515noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8542683203952246031.post-28892211770974825472012-07-30T20:12:38.260-05:002012-07-30T20:12:38.260-05:00I admit I had to read it twice to understand the o...I admit I had to read it twice to understand the opening, but it sounds like that was just a me thing, since everyone else seems to have gotten it. Then I really thought the metaphor was very well done!Lara Schiffbauerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13546286607078965432noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8542683203952246031.post-28580181697082623522012-07-30T19:52:24.075-05:002012-07-30T19:52:24.075-05:00Once again, you make me want to read more. Thanks ...Once again, you make me want to read more. Thanks so much for thinking of me! I'd better come up with something quick.Jennifer https://www.blogger.com/profile/14785197262272189538noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8542683203952246031.post-37857605455976136722012-07-30T18:57:58.263-05:002012-07-30T18:57:58.263-05:00Excellent advice!! Thank you!!Excellent advice!! Thank you!!Huntresshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08155372788872245758noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8542683203952246031.post-43186590260633386912012-07-30T18:44:29.448-05:002012-07-30T18:44:29.448-05:00oh, very fun excerpt. I love a good ghost story :)...oh, very fun excerpt. I love a good ghost story :)mshatchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8542683203952246031.post-71056175870344094132012-07-30T17:25:16.431-05:002012-07-30T17:25:16.431-05:00I absolutely love the opening paragraph. Love lov...I absolutely love the opening paragraph. Love love love it! But I think you should lose the "Graceful." As an adjective, it doesn't fit with the two preceding verbs or the "And slide the knife home" that comes next.<br /><br />Also, I feel like a noun should follow "prodding." Prodding tongue, perhaps?<br /><br />And I think you might want to give us a sense of what her hands are doing before they relax. I understand that you're trying to show, not tell, with the nail polish comment, but the image comes too late, in my opinion.<br /><br />But overall I love the metaphor, and this is very intriguing! I'd love to read more!Sam F.https://www.blogger.com/profile/04034367402431479011noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8542683203952246031.post-21005756840283072382012-07-30T17:19:33.955-05:002012-07-30T17:19:33.955-05:00Snarky lying ghosts - I like the humor!Snarky lying ghosts - I like the humor!Alex J. Cavanaughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09770065693345181702noreply@blogger.com