Think of the books sold because of the first page, the first sentence even.
My name was Salmon, like the fish; first name, Susie. – The Lovely Bones by Alice Sebold
Marley was dead; to begin with. – A Christmas Carol by Charles Dickens
I didn’t realize he was a werewolf at first. – Moon Called by Patricia Briggs
I felt her fear before I heard her screams. – The Vampire Academy by Richelle Mead
The hill people and the Mexicans arrived on the same day. – A Painted House by John Grisham
I heard the mailman approach my office door, half an hour earlier than usual. – Storm Front, The Dresden Files by Jim Butcher
Note what each example has in common.
Simple nouns combined with strong verbs. Few adjectives and nary an adverb. The first sentence takes the reader by the hand and yanks them into the roller coaster ride of the story.
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